Why do people lie? Why would someone Racking his brain and trying to come up with some clever words, to make another believe his imaginary facts? What is it for? Because so that the seniors will buy the unnecessarily expensive medical equipment? Because it gets them more likes under his Instagram posts? Or just trying to escape from the facts he doesn’t want to face?
If you take a closer look, you would realize our daily life is filled with all kinds of lies and the reasons are numerous. However, most of them won’t affect us so much, because those lies that causing trouble are often followed by the punishments. Liars who scam people for money will likely end up in jail; People lying to themselves would eventually wake up in the cruel reality.
So why there are so many crazy lies out there on the internet, and they are spread wildly? Because there’s no cost of lying on the internet! If someone spread fake scandal about the celebrities he hates or if spread his abusive words against strangers he argues with, nobody will find out who he is in the real-life, and he will keep doing that without getting any punishment. It is because of this, the internet has become a paradise for lies. However, it doesn’t mean that lie is the only thing left on the internet. The benefit of using the internet outweighs its cost, but we could get used to the lies and learn to identify them.
I think that you have a clear point, good voice, and strong opinions. However, I think a more concise introduction with fewer questions would do a better job of keeping the reader engaged. 6 questions in a row is very repetitive. I also think that you could strengthen your argument by including real-world examples in the second paragraph.
ReplyDeleteHi Zhongfu Bai! While you point is valid, lies and misinformation runs rampant on the internet, I feel like your blog post would be made a lot stronger by making a few fixes. First, the rhetorical questions are a little much, it was very easy to lose attention in the first paragraph. Second, an image would really help your piece flow and attract attention. Lastly, connecting the main idea to the theme of the class would really add a lot more value.
ReplyDeleteThe sheer amount of raw unchecked information makes it nearly impossible to fact check it all, I think that you make some good points.
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ReplyDeleteThis blog post has a clear structure and is easy to read. It seems to me that you have expressed a strong stance on the unreliability of the information online. However, most of the examples and explanations given in the blog post are rather subjective and do not have any references to back them up. Moreover, while rhetorical questions can serve as an interactive feature, they do seem to be a bit overused and long-winded in this article. I would suggest you to just keep one or two of them and provide more background information in the introduction paragraph.
ReplyDeleteYour blog topic is interesting, but I believe there's much to be worked on. To start, there's no connection to any of the readings. I would strongly suggest alluding to at least one reading that is related to your blog topic. Moreover, your claims are extremely general. Although generalizing can be beneficial, in your post, you should strive to provide some more details. For instance, you could provide a personal anecdote or provide supporting evidence (especially after this quote: "Liars who scam people for money will likely end up in jail"). You still have about 150 words before reaching the word limit - make use of this. The overwhelming usage of questions is also questionable. Like many other comments, I would suggest cutting down on this. Finally, make sure to go over grammar and syntax; I noted quite a lot of errors here and improving this will greatly help in making your blog post more legitimate and convincing.
ReplyDeleteHi Zhongfu, your blog topic is really interesting. As advice, I would try to have a tone that isn't as one sided in exposing sheer "lies." Keep in mind there are a lot of places that have nested interests and there are grey areas so try not to be super quick in calling general misinformation hard lies. Also to Harrison's point, lies on the internet have always been a thing, so try to distinguish malicious lies for things that easily could be a mistake or general internet banter.
ReplyDeleteZhongfu, one thing I liked about this blog post is the use of questions to "hook" the reader and immediately have them think about the topic being addressed.
ReplyDeleteI would recommend to ground the post and topic more about the reading or at least address the topic from the reading at the beginning of the post. When addressing the reading I recommend to show a understanding of the main position of the reading. I would take some of the repeated topics discussed in this post, focus on one specific one, and elaborate on this. You can possibly reference the reading while discussing this topic. Overall, great first blog post!
I think this is a start to an interesting article and it does raise some good questions, but it could benefit from having more concrete details and pulling from some readings. I would like to see expansion on a lot of the points you raised here.
ReplyDeleteInteresting post! The perspectives on "lie" can definitely catch reader's attention since it's not a really normal topic in our life. I see this as a good starting point. However, as a reader and student, I'm expecting more connection to the reading, which can make your blog more critic and "make more sense". The point of post is to leave impressions and can make readers think. It'll be better if there are more specific interesting examples. Looking for your revisions!
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